第三阶段 语言质量
1. 用词追求“高大上”?
Although I would like to see altruistic, understanding, thoughtful and loyal behavior from people, an instance of the opposite of these behaviors would not upset me as much as dishonesty would. Among all the possible behaviors, dishonesty is the only one for me that terminates how I feel about a person’s reliability. Therefore honesty would be my first concern and the most important consideration in a relationship.
本身就没有所谓的高大上。看满分范文，托福写作要求是说人话就行。生活化的用词就可以。唯一要注意的是，我们的用词是否足够精简。Upset和terminate可能是大家不会用的。一个词能够精简表达好几个词的意思。Will make me not trust him any more。所以很多时候不是是否足够高大上，而是足够精简。
与其说“高大上”，不如说“精简，恰当，自然”
而这个不是靠死背单词背出来的。有些同学是词霸，但是背单词并不解决用词恰当的问题。你拿的是单词书，只告诉你意思，并不告诉语境和用法。所以要多看范文，通过范文体会满分的用词和表达。考试前看满30篇范文，消化解决范文，考试绝对不会低。
提高用词一定是在文章中，在语境中熟悉用词。
顺便说下句式，我们看范文的时候是不是会思考它的句式。事实上，范文中多样的表达方式就是我们所缺少的。如果你分析和反思过，你的作文不会低。
Although I would like to see altruistic, understanding, thoughtful and loyal behavior from people, an instance of the opposite of these behaviors would not upset me as much as dishonesty would. Among all the possible behaviors, dishonesty is the only one for me that terminates how I feel about a person’s reliability. Therefore honesty would be my first concern and the most important consideration in a relationship.
2. 句子越长越好?
比如 I attended courses in NOS. Through the course I cleared my doubts.
变成 I attended courses in NOS which helped to clear my doubt.
但也有很多时候，长并不让句子精简，而是繁琐，而是confusing。比如下面两个句子：
我又一次被那个我很喜欢但是一年前已经拒绝过我的女生拒绝了。
我很喜欢一个女生。一年前，我向她告白，她拒绝了我;如今我再度鼓起勇气追求她，却再一次悲剧了。
所以，短句变长是为了避免冗余和重复，但是为了句子长而句子长，其实是在牺牲文章的清晰度。所以一个句子需要读很多遍才读懂……
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