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*超同学对于题目持有同意的观点 (Agree),他认为在国内旅游好处更多。以下是他的主旨句 (Thesis Statement) 。
“I deem I can benefit more from travelling in my own countries.”
我们这里节选他文章中两个主体段来分析其使用衔接手段的情况。
The most critical reason is time. As a traveler, I would prefer spending more time exploring my destination rather than getting stuck at the security checkpoint, sitting in the airplane, and waiting in a long queue at the custom, which are often associated with international travel. For example, if I have a week of vacation, instead of spending 2 days on the way, I could choose a destination that may only take me [a] couple [of] hours to get there that means I have 1 extra more vacation day.
Secondly, ….
Lastly, international trip can cost travelers significantly more comparing to a domestic one. Admittedly, cost of a trip is often determined personal choice and preference but a lot of fees, such as visa and currency exchange, are often inevitable. In addition, to save money in another unknown country can be a lot more challenging.
分析:
该文段使用的衔接手段主要是:(一)词汇衔接-同义词; 词汇衔接- one/ ones 替代(二)语法衔接中的比较级 (三)修辞衔接中的平行结构 (parallelism)
首先第一段中连续使用了三个平行结构来表达到国外旅游可能会遇到的不方便 “getting stuck at the security checkpoint” , “sitting in the airplane” , “waiting in a long queue at the custom”, 另外, “international travel” 以及第三段中的 “international trip” 是同义词,“domestic” 是题目中 “in their own country” 同义表达,最后 “domestic one” 当中的 “one” 也是为了避免重复前面的内容而进行指代的。
这些衔接手段的使用增加了上下文内容的连贯性,也丰富了语言表达形式,使得段落内容清晰紧密生动。 两段的内容不算多,但单从衔接手段的角度来讲还是值得各位考生学习和借鉴的。
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