(2014/12/27)Young people today are more likely to help others than the young were in the past.
In contemporary society, there is a growing tendency that people are less and less concerned about others business(社会现象引入), which has aroused deeply social concern. Therefore, when it comes to the issue whether it becomes less likely for youngsters today to help others than their counterparts in the past(转述题目), people varying in personalities and ages view the same issue from different angles. However, as far as I am concerned, young people today are less likely to help others than the young were in the past, due to the limited spare time they possessed and the fierce competition they are involved in(主题句：个人立场+概括论证段分论点).
To begin with, there is no denying that the less free time owned by the young people will reduce the likelihood that they help others, which particularly applies to the students in school(段首句：联系分论点1和立场). As we know, the increasingly heavy study burden has dramatically decreased the leisure time of students(解释句：解释分论点如何支持立场). According to a survey conducted by Education Ministry of China, the time students spent on learning in 2014 was more than 8 hours per day, while this figure in 1994 was only 6 hours every day. The great difference in the two figures clearly demonstrate that student’s study time has increased a lot, which in turn decreased their free time. And less free time means that students have less chances to provide help to others.(论证句：通过数据段内对比). Therefore, the decrease in the free time of young people has made it less possible to help others(总结句：转述段首句).
Furthermore, the more fierce competition nowadays is another factor which makes young people less likely to help others(段首句：联系分论点2和立场). One defining character of people is the degree to which they tend to care more about their own interests in a competition(解释句：解释分论点如何支持立场). Job hunting is a good case in point. Just imagine that there are 10 candidates competing for one position, which means that the winner has to outcompete the others. Obviously, each candidate would regard others as his enemies instead of friends, thus providing no help for the other one. However, in the past, the competition was not so fierce as it is today. As a result, the youngsters treated others more friendly (论证句：例子/数据/说理). Thus, helping others is becoming less and less possible for young people today because of the more competitive environment.(总结句)
Judging from what has been discussed above, we can draw the conclusion that young people today are less likely to assist others than they were in the past, on account of the limited leisure time they owned and the fierce competition they are involved(结尾段：重申主题 + 总结论据)
第二段分论点 1 + 解释句+例证 1 分
第三段分论点 2 + 解释句+例证 2
二. 语言分析：(language use)
举个例子来说，文章中“空闲时间”这个短语，笔者用了spare time, leisure time 和 free time，所以要多去积累同义短语。
原题：Young people today are more likely to help others than the young were in the past.
(1) …will reduce the likelihood that they help others
(2) …has made it less possible to help others
(3) helping others is becoming less and less possible for young people today