新东方网留学托福首页托福辅导托福综合辅导正文

新东方托福写作语料库: 挑战性的工作是否带来更多幸福感

2015-09-10 18:37

来源:

作者:薛鹏

  新东方网托福频道邀请特约作者薛鹏老师大家分享原创托福写作语料库系列文章,帮助考生思路拓展,积累精彩写作语料。建议阅读背诵原创语料库,关注新东方托福语料库(汇总),祝福大家文思泉涌,妙笔生花,破题如竹!更多精彩内容欢迎持续关注新东方网托福频道。

  【创作感言】:

  我非作家,但以作家自律。过程并不重要,以结果为导向,写作范文,甘苦自知。创作是辛苦并快乐的,尤其是当你忠实于自我情感,自由表达的时候。本篇讲述了小鹏哥勇攀高峰和西藏旅行的故事。希望,你的故事也是一样的个性和精彩。

  【观点类】:

   People will feel happier when they finish a challenging or difficult work than an easy job.当人们完成一项很有挑战性或困难的工作的时候,人们更加幸福,是否认同? (2009 年8月2日)

  【相关题目】:

  Which is a better choice, challenging plans about one's future or practical plans about one's future? 挑战性的计划和实际的计划,哪个是更好的选择?

  【头脑风暴导言】:

  孔明从来不问:为何我们的箭如此之少,于是,有了草船借箭。

  关羽从来不问:为何我的士兵如此之少,但是,依然过五关斩六将。

  张飞从来不问:曹兵追击如何是好,于是,有了据水断桥,一声怒吼,吓退曹兵百万。

  子龙接到军令:攻下城池,其手中只有20兵将,功成之时,已然连下城池,增兵2万,马匹3千。

  如果万事俱备,你的价值何在?因为艰难,彰显珍贵。

  如果顺风顺水,你的快乐何在?珍重过程,喜极而泣。

  成功的奥秘仅有两条:赢在执行,坚持惯性。

  快乐的源泉包含两种:披荆斩棘,美梦成真。

  【作家立场】对比完成简单工作,为充满挑战的任务而奋斗才能使我们感受到最多的快乐。

  【思路拓展】

  1. 生活中无以伦比的幸福就是坚信我们可以通过诚实努力,实现心中梦想。过程的艰难提升了成功后的幸福指数,因为努力,期待,等待的过程使成功后的喜悦变得弥足珍贵。

  2. 当你可以坚持别人坚持不了的坚持,当你可以忍受别人忍受不了的忍受的时候,你也将会信心倍增。当你可以完成他人无法完成的任务,自我成就感自然带来心灵的满足。

  3. 通常,梦想似乎遥不可及,但是,即使在圆梦的路上充满挫败,我们的幸福感,我们的锦绣前程就在这些挫败的背后藏身。

  【文章布局】:

  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  二段:第一次支持作家立场

  三段:第二次支持作家立场

  四段:让步对立观点的合理性 + 反驳其不合理性

  尾段:再次亮明观点 + (总结理由)

  【原创范文】:

  {首段}:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  Every individual desires to achieve success. Pitifully, we sometimes dare not to accept challenging tasks because we have often experienced the frustration that derives from failure. However, we play to win, and our lives have little meaning unless we do our utmost to win. In this sense, compared with finishing easy jobs,only striving for demanding tasks can enable us to savor the supreme sense of well-being.

  【解析】:

  1. Every individual desires to achieve success 人人渴望成功。

  2. Pitifully,we sometimes dare not to accept challenging tasks because we have often experienced the frustration that derives from failure. 令人遗憾的是:我们有时候不敢接受挑战性的任务,是因为以往的经验告诉我们有些事情是办不到的。

  3. Compared with finishing easy jobs,only striving for demanding tasks can enable us to savor the supreme sense of well-being. 对比完成简单工作,为充满挑战的任务而奋斗才能使我们感受到最多的快乐。

  {二段}:第一次支持作家立场:

  To begin with, the incomparable happiness of life is the conviction that we can achieve what our hearts desire by honest hard work. It is no easy task to fulfill our ambition,the harder the process is,the happier our hearts will be. For example, when I climb a high mountain, I need to face up to many unexpected hardships such as capricious weather,steep rocks even possible exhaust of physical strength, however, the arduousness of surmounting the cliffy mountain is much more thrilling than a normal self-travel. What rewards me is the greatest contentment coming from beautiful expectation,constant wade and time-consuming wait.

  【解析】:

  1. The incomparable happiness of life is the conviction that we can achieve what our hearts desire by honest hard work. 生活中无以伦比的幸福就是坚信我们可以通过诚实努力,实现心中梦想。

  2. I need to face up to many unexpected hardships such as capricious weather,steep rocks even possible exhaust of physical strength 我不得不面对很多意想不到的艰难,例如莫测的天气,陡峭的岩石,甚至是体能的消耗。

  3. The arduousness of surmounting the cliffy mountain is much more thrilling than a normal self-travel. 征服陡峭高山的艰辛远比常态的自由行更加令人兴奋。

  {三段}:第二次支持作家立场:

  Also, when I stick to what most people fail to persist, when I can tolerate most people fail to endure, my self-assertiveness grows. The satisfaction of knowing that I successfully did something others cannot do multiplies my happiness index. As a fancier of self-travel,I once explored Tibet by myself,instead of choosing a metropolis as my sightseeing destination,I opted for a challenging city,what I needed to get over includes altitude stress,cultural differences and the lack of vehicle. However, the stunning landscapes such as spacious lake, lofty mountains and fascinating buildings are only exclusive to Tibet. Imaginably, the success of finishing hard self-trip in Tibet brought me unique happiness that I can never acquire when visiting other scenic spots.

  【解析】:

  1. Also, when I stick to what most people fail to persist, when I can tolerate most people fail to endure, my self-assertiveness grows. 当我可以坚持别人坚持不了的坚持,当我可以忍受别人忍受不了的忍受的时候,我也将会信心倍增。

  2. The satisfaction of knowing that I successfully did something others cannot do multiplies my happiness index. 知道我可以完成他人无法完成的任务确实增强我的幸福指数。

  3. What I needed to get over includes altitude stress,cultural differences and the lack of vehicle. 我要克服高原反应,文化差异,甚至是交通工具的匮乏。

  4. The stunning landscapes such as spacious lake, lofty mountains and fascinating buildings are only exclusive to Tibet. 壮丽的景色,例如辽阔的大湖,宏伟的大山,迷人的建筑,也只有在西藏,我们才能欣赏。

  {四段}:让步对立观点的合理性:

  Granted, I have to concede that some people might remain suspicious of my stand. Some people might believe happy life needs no challenges, challenges might make them doubt ourselves, dampen their enthusiasm and even ruin their sense of satisfaction. Nevertheless, I want to refute that those who enjoy adversity-free youths can easily be derailed by few setbacks later on. One the best ways to acquire resilience and embrace success is through experiencing a difficult growth experience.

  【解析】:

  1. Some people might remain suspicious of my stand.也许有人对我的立场持怀疑态度。

  2. Those who enjoy adversity-free youths can easily be derailed by few setbacks later on. 那些青春岁月顺风顺水的人,在未来的生活中,很容易因为一点点挫败就迷失方向。

  3. One the best ways to acquire resilience and taste happiness is through experiencing a difficult growth experience. 使人变得达观,拥抱成功的最佳方式之一就是经历一段艰难的成长岁月。

  {尾段}:再次亮明观点 + 总结理由:

  In closing, my stand is that people will feel happier when they finish a challenging task than a relaxing job. Oftentimes,dream just seems too far out of reach, however, though hardships may sometimes stand in the way of our dreams,our sense of happiness, our rosy future are hiding behind them.

  【解析】:

  Oftentimes,dream just seems too far out of reach. However,though hardships may sometimes stand in the way of our dreams,our sense of happiness, our rosy future are hiding behind them. 通常,梦想似乎遥不可及。然而,即使在圆梦的路上充满挫败,我们的幸福感,我们的锦绣前程就在这些挫败的背后藏身。

  【作者介绍】

  新东方网专栏作家:薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥),高中时代出版诗文集《选择坚强》, 每年创作20万字托福雅思原创语料库以及范文。吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历),前长春新东方功勋教师,多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思写作8分,托福写作29分)。

  爱生活,爱运动,爱音乐电影,爱旅行美食,爱读书摄影,更爱英语教学。20岁登上英语讲台,主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉GRE、IELTS、TOEFL、SAT、CET等各级别词汇教学。

  大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你学单词”等专栏。2006年获得“外研社/朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军,全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。

  对于各类写作课程有精深研究,授课方式行云流水,妙语连珠,知识底蕴深厚,对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。

  教学理念:Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水,而是点燃一把火)

(编辑:Joe)

  版权声明:本文系新东方网独家稿件,版权为新东方网所有。转载须注明来源及作者,否则必将追究法律责任。

新东方托福微信

新东方网托福官方微信:新东方托福 (微信号:xdftoefl

最新考试资讯、托福预测、托福解析,请扫一扫二维码,关注我们的官方微信! 

托福头条

  • 托福考试
  • 名师辅导
  • 托福辅导
  • 留学资讯

          新东方托福辅导专区

          班级名称 上课地点 上课时间 费用 详细

          焦点推荐

          版权及免责声明

          凡本网注明"稿件来源:新东方"的所有文字、图片和音视频稿件,版权均属新东方教育科技集团(含本网和新东方网) 所有,任何媒体、网站或个人未经本网协议授权不得转载、链接、转贴或以其他任何方式复制、发表。已经本网协议授权的媒体、网站,在下载使用时必须注明"稿件来源:新东方",违者本网将依法追究法律责任。

          本网未注明"稿件来源:新东方"的文/图等稿件均为转载稿,本网转载仅基于传递更多信息之目的,并不意味着赞同转载稿的观点或证实其内容的真实性。如其他媒体、网站或个人从本网下载使用,必须保留本网注明的"稿件来源",并自负版权等法律责任。如擅自篡改为"稿件来源:新东方",本网将依法追究法律责任。

          如本网转载稿涉及版权等问题,请作者见稿后在两周内速来电与新东方网联系,电话:010-60908555。